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May 19th, 2002, 03:53 PM | #1 |
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Lost in Anguish
by: Sword 4 Hire The feeling is like nothing you've ever felt Trapped in a vortex of a thousand thoughts All of them echoing at once Making your headache and your body feeling numb As if you were to fall But no one would be there to catch you Or ask if you were all right You taste nothing but the back of your throat You have trouble breathing and your chest grows heavy with panic You try to swallow what little pride you have left But to no avail The pain still lingers deep It smells like smoke Like an explosion had just taken place Dark spirals of fog taint the air that you inhabit You can't see The ash is too thick to part Or run from You're alone You reach out Hoping to find another But all you feel is the air The cold, damp air Recycled memories still occupy it Dance in it And suck you into it Head over heels Unaware Those are the times of panic Those are the times of fright Those are the times of feeling alone Those are the times when You're lost in anguish
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May 19th, 2002, 03:57 PM | #2 |
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Very Nice
Thats Great Work Sword, Very Nice Infact, I Would Like To Know When Exactly Did U Write This Poem, And The Reason.
Well Done!
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May 19th, 2002, 05:15 PM | #3 |
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Wow, you're quite the poet. I salute you, very wel done.
Oh, and I'd like to know the answers to Makg's question as well.
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May 19th, 2002, 05:32 PM | #4 |
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I actually wrote it recently...I've been goin through a lot of trauma and what not with my life and I thought I'd write something darker than usual...it has to do with that one split second of horror...when you first hear or see something and you can't do anything about it...before you can even calm yourself down or breathe...
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May 19th, 2002, 05:46 PM | #5 |
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Had A Feeling.
I Knew U'd Say Something Like That........Cause All What U Just Said, Can Be Seen And Felt By Ure Poem. But Be Positive As Well And It'll All Be Cool, Trust Me.
Very Nice Thing U Have Up There Though.
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May 19th, 2002, 05:49 PM | #6 |
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Thank you Makg...
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May 19th, 2002, 08:20 PM | #7 |
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Very good, I like it
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May 19th, 2002, 08:22 PM | #8 |
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Wow. Like CC said, you really are a poet!
This is another great poem S4H. It's very true and very touching. But hang in there. There are times which are just really rough. Everything will turn out fine... just give it a little time Again, that was a truly great poem. |
May 22nd, 2002, 11:21 AM | #9 |
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GREAT POEM!! Truly man, that was a great experience!
You have quite the gift. You should sell that, as a song or something, it has great lyrical content and i know that it would sound great as a song. I actually sang it to myself.
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May 22nd, 2002, 12:51 PM | #10 |
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Thank you
And thank you trunks...I never thought about turning my poems into songs...I'll keep that in mind next time
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Jun 11th, 2002, 10:30 AM | #11 |
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Good Poem...
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Jun 11th, 2002, 02:01 PM | #12 |
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Yes... the trauma and hardships of life can bring out some good poetry. Espeacially in your case, nice poem!
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Jun 12th, 2002, 11:36 AM | #13 |
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I like it a lot. You did a really good job....excuse me....great job.. There's a lot of feeling in this poem...and the images that raise to your head from the words are beyond good. I hope to read more of your poems....Good day!
I rate this thread best...ought
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Jun 13th, 2002, 09:38 PM | #14 |
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I like the way your poem is been made up.. Great!!
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