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Mar 31st, 2002, 05:38 PM | #1 |
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invincible part 5
Here is the next part, hope that you enjoy it
As soon as they looked up a me in the air and noticed that it was not I in the pile of dust in the air before them, a horrific look loomed over their heartless faces. As I started my decent I opened fire, they dropped like flies hitting a bug zapper, their blood filled the streets as it made its way to the gutter. When I got to the ground, I had seized fire, and looked around at the few remaining members that attempted to take my life from me. I then stood up and put away my two guns. No sooner then they saw me put away my guns, was I behind two of those hideous beasts, I then kicked the one on the left so hard that he nailed the guy on the right causing him to take flight from the force. They hit the ground ten or so feet ahead. There was one left, he came out in front of me and picked up a gun from the ground that belonged to one of his friends and opened fire on me again, but this time he stopped and I appeared directly in front of him, pulled out a gun. "Dodge this you mother f*cker," I yelled as I pulled the trigger. I looked around and found nothing, not even a trace of my young sister. I then decided that I would continue my search, hopping that I could find her soon. If I found her soon enough I could then hurry over to the television station to see if there was any trace of life there. As I started my stroll down the middle of the center street in town, I felt something that made me turn around, you know it was one of those sixth sense feelings that you know that you were being watched but found no sign of it. It was one of those. I then turned around and faced forward again. Yet though I still had that feeling that I was being watched, but I didn’t worry about it too much. In the distance I saw the television broadcast station, it was half gone and there was smoke coming out of the roof as if there was a fire inside like in a fire place, but I knew that the station had none. I did not know what to do, for the first time in my life I had not known what to do. Should I go after my sister and risk the lives of any surviving people in the station and save them last if there was time, or should I go to the station first and save the people there if there would be any, from here there was no way to tell, there may be nobody in that place though and would waste time, and the hopes of finding my lost sister dwindles by a piece of thread each passing moment. Save the lives of many or find and save my sister and preserve my family? This is way too much for one person to handle in a lifetime let alone in a mere day, but any way I do not know what to do. I stop and think, but I cant just stop and think because if I do then I am risking the lives of both the crew at the station and me little sister. I think then since I cannot loose another member of my family I will go after my sister and bid the people at the station to hold on. What if she is at the station? What if for intimidation they would broadcast her on television in hopes for me to cooperate? If she is there here I come. If not, well I just hope that she can hold on just a little longer till I come.
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Apr 1st, 2002, 11:26 AM | #2 |
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Wow your story is really good 007
The ending of this chapter was really well done as well, I like it. Can't wait to read the next chapter, keep it up!
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Apr 1st, 2002, 09:11 PM | #3 |
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It's about damn time! I've been waiting for the next part for such a long time. Well anyway, it's turning out great, keep it up.
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Apr 2nd, 2002, 12:11 PM | #4 |
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well I am sorry that it takes for ever for me to put it up when I am not at school because my damn A drive at home only works half the time, next part will be up soon
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Apr 4th, 2002, 05:45 PM | #5 |
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Glad to see you posted the next part of your story
This one was very good regarding the feelings of the character. Even if they're not described directly, you can understand everything very well. |
Apr 4th, 2002, 08:47 PM | #6 |
Angel of Darkness
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Thank you, it is good to know that my story is liked by some people
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