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First of all, is "Betrayal" the title of the whole story or the title of chapter 1? It's not bad for a beginning, but it'd be cool if later readers could get a little deeper into each character's personality. Ok, for the present moment we only have few traits for any of them, as this is just an introduction, and it'd be terrible to give away every detail now, but it'd be really bad if with the proceeding of the story we got nothing more than this. Like for example, you said Jade is a cute girl with an attitude. Right, but this happens in billions of other stories, so it'd be nice to know more about her, just to not have a general description, which is not very "personal".
That's my suggestion, but as I said, for being a beginning this sounds good, so if you like writing this story, don't give up! Do it for your pleasure mainly!
Good luck!
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