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Oh it is a very good poem! I shall read the older ones!
But it is bitter and sad! Are you one of those people who think poetry is only about sadness and melancholy? Don't take me wrong, I'm really curious to know your opinion!

First of all thank you! The fact that you enjoy it even though it seems so bitter and sad to you tells me that you are somebody who can appreciate all kinds of art which is a remarkable quality.
As for answering your post...I do not agree with the word bitter so much. Yes it is a sad poem, but as I wrote it my intentions were not so much bitter as they were just really full of despair for the subject. If bitterness is in there, it's because it found it's way out of me anyways.
On the other note, no I am not one of those people who believes poetry is only about sadness and melancholy. My guess is you mean to say things that to most would be considered negative. Actually I have a very strong opinion about this subject and I could write abook on it so ask me if you want, but I'll shorten my answer by saying I do not believe that the energy expressed or finding an outlet when turned into a work of art is ever wholly negative or positive, especially in the things that I do with anything from songwriting to scribbling in notebooks. Sorry...I'm stretching the answer...I guess it would be no I'm not one of those people, but I also wanted to make the point that stuff that one may consider negative may not seem completely that way to someone else. There is a lot of positive energy going into that poem. There is hope to be found in it for people who understand it deep enough. (if you want me to tell you the story behind it PM me and I will.)

Your poems are good from the title on
I agree that this seems clearer and less "dark" than the greatest part of your works. It has more melancholy in it and no disturbing imagery at all. But still it's very well written. If it is a rough draft, are you going to rewrite it?

Thanks Fortune The fact that you see that this poem is less dark than the others makes me feel as though its possible that I may have succeeded in telling it the way I wanted...that it came from my heart to the paper correctly. This time I did want a positive message lurking in all that... wellwhat could be seen at first glance as negativity. It may seem ironic to a lot of people "hey wait a minute isn't darkness supposed to be what lurks...this poem's message is turned inside out."
Hrah! what potential you've helped me realize this has! Yes, I was planning on rewriting it and now I want to more than ever thanks to the fact you enjoyed it
Actually, I think there could be what would be disturbing imagery in there...but maybe no tin the sense you're used to. It's almost scarier now that I think about it than some of the imagery in my other peices.

Is it a temporary change of style or you're more into less complex things at this moment? BTW, the poem is good, definitely, even if it's a rough draft. But I bet you knew it

I think I decided its not a temporary change in style. In fact I may start using this style just as much as the other I have grown so attached to now. Well, maybe not quite as much, but I'm gonna explore this style more often now, maybe. Thanks for the compliment


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