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I think the story could be very good if you know how to develop it. You have the material and from what I see you're not unable to write. Depends on what direction you're going to take. If it's not mystery and it all revolves around the main character, you must pay attention, because it's easy to lose the point of your plot if you don't have an idea in mind.
But from the title I have to suppose you have the idea in mind...
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