That poem is really good! I hope you to post more of them!
I think I liked especially division in those two parts, and the fact the first one is more explicit, while the second one, though it's not clear without reading the first verses, it's really the one that gave me the idea of the "ennui" ( I won't ruin everything translating in english the french term
). BTW, the language is really suitable and ok, I liked it!