I think that it actually sounds pretty good. I was confused at first, but then I read it out loud.
What was the message or the main thought of the poem?
I know you are thinking dumbass, it's about september 11. Would you care to explain it more?
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All around me are familiar faces
Worn out places Worn out faces
Bright & early for the daily races
Going nowhere Going nowhere
Their tears R filling up their glasses
No Xpression No Xpression
Hide my head I want to drown my sorrows

No 2morrow No 2morrow
& I find it kindof funny I find it kindof sad.
These dreams in which i'm dying, R the best I've ever had
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