TrikTopz, alittle advice, shouldve had a name in the subject.
And nobody in this whole site is going to read that long thing.
I can't even read it.
Shouldve also did it a half-a-chapter at a time.
Like have a half-a-chapter, and let people read it, and post things about it.
I am going to post a new story, and look at what I do, and learn from it.
Sorry to be rude, but thats how you are gonna get people to read it.
