Hey this story is really comming along. I'm enjoying it a lot. I urge you to continue with this.
One comment, every time someone says something, start it out on a new line, so it's easier to read.
Cannibal Clown: Okay, do you understand what I'm getting at with the new line thing for every time someone talks?
Baretta55: Okay, I get it now, thanks for the advice Cannibal Clown. I think that everyone should have a great and unbelievably cool friend like you.
Cannibal Clown: Why thank you. I'm very happy you think of me as such a cool person.
That is what I'm talking about. Whenever someone talks, start it out on a new line. It's easier on the eyes.
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