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Old Apr 13th, 2002, 02:55 PM   #2
Carlito
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Don't worry! The story is really interesting as it is.
I think the last parts are very good. It was a good idea to add more details of thoughts and feelings and less action, so it won't become boring after few chapters.

Again: great job!
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