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Originally Posted by Vicious_2003
There's this strong force stressing the chilling sincerity to describe the essential spirituality I've obtained
Was a little wordy. Its obvious you have a good understanding of a good vocabulary. That goes without saying... But my advice would be to dumb it down a bit for the general public. And so that it doesent seem to some that your overdoing it a bit. you certainly get your point across well though
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You know how sometimes there is so many things you want to say at once or describe something so throughly that you can't use the root word or else the whole point of you putting it there would be useless.
It's like making a Chocolate, layered cake and forgetting to add the yeast and cocoa mix.