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Originally Posted by Hylas
Nice work eli 
I'd like to ask... is it dedicated to someone in particular?
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Well it's not dedicated to anyone but it's about someone who i've been thinking and missing alot lately..
..hope that answers your question..
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I felt like you were trying to create a rhythm that you didn't quite tackle throughout your poem and your pacing seems off. You have some errors in there, like spelling, that I would suggest changing. Believe it or not, sometimes spelling errors can distort the poem in its entirety. Your message has potential but the way you convey your break down is weak.
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Well i don't intend to writte as a professional would ..i only wrotte what i was feeling last night and well me being portuguese it's obviously that i may make some spelling errors while writting in english ...but thanks for your opinion..