charmed fan poem 2

[kittens&cats]

******firefly poem*****************
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phoebe bb was out in the garden late at night trying to catch
fireflys soon she caught four and shove them up her nose and
made her eyes glow hyper piper got really hyper paige stage
said we need a doctor for those two geeks leo weo said yep
paige stage we need a doctor for those two billys and cole bole
said yep paige stage we need a doctor for those two bows
then hyper piper caught fireflys and shove them up her nose and
mad her eyes glow then paige stage caught fireflys and shove
them up her nose and made her eyes glow then leo weo caught
fireflys and shove them up his nose and made his eyes glow
then cole bole caught fireflys and shove them up his nose and
made his eyes glow it wasn't dark anymore and soon it was
light.a few days later they had a firefly party and had a great time
by riley e harris

[Faile]

please learn the use of punctuation.

[Ruby Moon]

Originally posted by Faile

please learn the use of punctuation.

Maiybe this is an example of stream of consciousness, ne?
This poem is one of the weirdest I've read here!

[Faile]

i'm sorry but there is no evidence of this being a stream of conciousness thought.

If it was correctly spelt and punctuated to the extent that stream of conciousness poetry normally is then it would be acceptable.

But really, it's not like I'm asking the earth, just the correct spelling of fireflies and the like.

xx

[Ruby Moon]

I wasn't saying it was real stream of consciousness, I was only kidding, but sorry, I won't do it again :laugh:

[FlexMasterRice]

that is a funny poem! hahah.....love it.

[Faile]

eek !

i didn't mean to sound mean

*hides*


eek ! eek !

[Redpyramidhead]

Don't hide! We were just expressing different opinions. To me, the punctuation doesn't seem all that important compared to the feel of the poem or stream of consciousness or whatever it is. I like it...it was a nice little mind trip. Seemed simple in its fantasyness and like some kind of escape from complicated realities. keep em coming kittens&cats. :cool:

_RED_ stuff

[kittens&cats]

ok guys for those who read my little niece poem in fanfiction
well there a tv show call charmed it about three sisters that
are witches and they fight against evil.the stars of charmed are
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Aylssa milano as phoebe tunner
rose mcgowan as paige
holly marie combs as piper wytta
brian krause as leo wytta
julian mchon as cole tunner
before sheleft the shannen dorthey as prue.
sorry if i miss spell shannen last name

[Faile]

well, i certainly feel enlightened.

[FlexMasterRice]

absolutely marvelous......two thumbs up....confuse me some more.
intrigue me.

[Faile]

its all strangely alice in wonderland esque.

and i've just woken up from a nap.

where am i ? whats going on ?


zzzzzz

[FlexMasterRice]

:roll: ahh yes, that one definetly hits the spot...must be a pretty good fan if you write poems about the show!

I'm tired as well and reading that stuff just makes my mind work too hard...XD

but overall....uh.....very interesting... Post some more!!!


here's my haiku:

a poem that is about Charmed
relentless chaos
the words are confusing me :drool:

oh my god, that is bad....