This sucks

[AudioBoxer]

It sucks
It sucks when you see it
I had it happen to me
Some people have
Some not
It made me and others cry
As you can see I am fine now
But I still dream
I cry nights to nights
Not no more
But when It happened I felt dead
Dead as she did
My hands felt numb
I could not touch
I couldnt feel her hair
It was the last time
That I would see my mom

This really sucks but I did it like in 2 seconds, it is prob one of the worst poems ever!!!!!!!!!!!!!!;)

[MakgSnake]

Its your thoughts, your instincts...... Pretty good.

[playa066]

pretty dAMN good

[AudioBoxer]

For reals though do you really like it? I just made it up like in 10 seconds!

[MakgSnake]

Originally posted by AudioBoxer
For reals though do you really like it? I just made it up like in 10 seconds!
I know, I mean thats why I said.....your instincts....whatever came in your mind. You kept it real. Neat.

[AudioBoxer]

Ight sweet thanx

[Ninja]

damn man, same thing happened 2 me, when I was 9 I saw my mom 4 the last time, and never saw her again

[Redpyramidhead]

I dug this Audio. Often it's hard to get one's self to be able to be happy with a poem that they have themself write about a specific thing like this, especially something that's such a serious issue. I think you took an interesting approach by just saying what came to your head about things at a given moment. I think you inadvertantly found a solution to this problem in poetry writing. Good job :cool:



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