Dizes

[AudioBoxer]

When you see it in your eyes,
Its a total surprise,
You loved her once,
But she was no Dunce,
She hit that wall,
It made me fall,
My life was over,
Then I thought of that Clover,
Yes she was a cute,
the bute was she was nice,
Clean and the one for me,
but she was gone,
gone with the wind,
yes I know,
what you are thinking,
she is dead,
yes she is,
so now am I

[Lost_myth]

The first half was excellent, but then you stopped rhyming and still had the rythme. Which was a little confusing, might make more sense if I re-read it. But overall really nice poem, enjoyable. Good sense of meaning. Maybe you should show off the transition by making a new paragraph.

[AudioBoxer]

No I kinda like it like this cus then the 2nd part is where the true meaning of it comes out!

[Noki Noki]

:happy: When it starts to pull out of the rhyme scheme, the poem sounds like two different verses.. I like it.

Especially that mid-poem transition - sounds good!

[Lost_myth]

My bad, I had to re-read it to understand, interesting style.