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[trunks69420]

Now before you read this ... "poem" let me give you a little background... i wrote this last night... just after i found out the girl that i put so much love into had been seeing someone towards the end of our relationship and not even a full two days after breaking up she was already with him... so i wrote this in an extremely ragefull mood... if its too much block it... but this is how i was feeling at a particular time... and some people told me it was really good... so here it is...


I will rip your head off.... i will shit down your throat
everything i felt was nothing but a goddamn joke
you took advantage of everything kind
you made me lose all sanity in my mind
but now i get revenge on you and that cart pushing f*cker
i will cut you so deep you mother f*cker
for the first time i've known you i hope you die
i wish i could stab out your beautiful eyes
cut up your goddamn beautiful face
leave you in a heap of bloody disgrace
So i say f*ck you and i am out the door again
die and goto hell my heart is sore again.

[tempted]

Well i already told you what i think about it awhile ago but i'll say it again...it's quite good but sad at the same time...it's amazing how some people can writte well when they are depressed..you're just another one of them..too bad it had to happen all that stuff to make you writte like this..i liked alot more of that one you made about your friend Mike you should post that one in here as well it's very good..

[Lost_myth]

You know me Cor-Cor, I told you it was great and not just because of the violence. I think your style is very powerful to which it had shown how you felt and it made me feel that way also. Stop thinking you are a bad writer. Everyone has their own personal style. You are always going to find someone out in the world who doesn't like one of your pieces even if the only person in the world who hates it is yourself.

[Hylas]

I can see why those words in shuch situation, but whoa, so much rage in it! Are you sure you can really hate somebody so much? A person you loved before being betrayed? Very sad

[trunks69420]

Originally Posted by Hylas

I can see why those words in shuch situation, but whoa, so much rage in it! Are you sure you can really hate somebody so much? A person you loved before being betrayed? Very sad

It was temporary rage... it was written as i found it out... yeah.. i know it is harsh... it felt like my heart was torn out of my chest... but only after being grinded by a rusty drill and pulled around in there for a while... so i was hurting... Now... i just dont care... F* that girl... i am better than her... so you know what? i just could care less and i think its sad that she has to latch onto someone just to feel better i am the better person... so she can goto hell... i still have love for her... but its about... 2%of what it was... she is my friend and will remain that... its just gonna be rough for a while.. heh but thanks everyone for your thoughts....

[Redpyramidhead]

It sounds like Nine Inch Nails the early years And maybe a little Miles Davis... if he spoke those crazy sounds instead of playin them out his trumpet... yeah Before he locked himself in the room for a year, though. That was a different sort of beast. Trunks, keep it coming, my fav
cat.

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