poem fantasytiger original

fantasytiger · Feb 10th, 2004, 02:49 PM

Love can shine like glass
Reflect a bitter past

Show persons true self
And the truth about someone else

Love can cut just like
But this pain lasts
Leaves a deep eternal wound
That will not be forgotten soon

A cut that will never
Truly heal with time
and a permanent scar
that severs to remind

you of everything you once had

but love above all is soooo fragile
because
it
shatters
just
like
glass

COPY WRITTEN@

tempted · Feb 10th, 2004, 03:04 PM

Really nice poem Fantasy,seems like a very deep and personal
one but still very good in my opinion...

Piggle_humsy · Feb 11th, 2004, 12:10 AM

Nice work Tiger.

Faile · Feb 12th, 2004, 01:40 PM

I like this one. One comment is that you don't need so many 'ooooo' on the so. Its a bit unnecessary. A better way to represent what you are meaning there is to put the so into bold or italics.

fantasytiger · Feb 13th, 2004, 09:24 AM

the reason I added the "OOOO" is because when you read it you are suppose to extend the sound just like when someone adds ........... it means you suppose to have a dramatic pause befor you continue reading it adds dramatic emphasis on the word

trunks69420 · Feb 14th, 2004, 06:07 AM

I like this one... It gets me thinkin a bit about my current situation... and i really like how you desribe it... plus you used one of my fav words... "fragile... *nin reference

*...

Again.. i really like this a lot

Redpyramidhead · Feb 21st, 2004, 09:03 AM

I like it fantasytiger! I like the reference to glass as a metaphor for love on it seems like 3 or more different levels in there. The reflection part at the beginning is a great place for that so it draws you right in and at the end when all is shattering....oohhh...

Keep writing

_RED_ stuff

Rei · Mar 13th, 2004, 02:17 PM

Nice poem tiger, didn't know you like writing poems, now I know it! Keep it up!

Feb 10th, 2004, 02:49 PM	#1
fantasytiger Dark Queen Joined: Dec 2002 Location: in your dreams Age: 37 Posts: 589	poem fantasytiger original Love can shine like glass Reflect a bitter past Show persons true self And the truth about someone else Love can cut just like But this pain lasts Leaves a deep eternal wound That will not be forgotten soon A cut that will never Truly heal with time and a permanent scar that severs to remind you of everything you once had but love above all is soooo fragile because it shatters just like glass COPY WRITTEN@

Feb 11th, 2004, 12:10 AM	#3
Piggle_humsy The One & Only Joined: Dec 2002 Location: Being Reborn Age: 41 Posts: 2,132	Nice work Tiger. __________________

Feb 12th, 2004, 01:40 PM	#4
Faile ys. Joined: Jan 2002 Location: ex-ex-exeter, disunited kingdom Age: 40 Posts: 1,137	I like this one. One comment is that you don't need so many 'ooooo' on the so. Its a bit unnecessary. A better way to represent what you are meaning there is to put the so into bold or italics. __________________ www.catherineandtheowl.com purr. miaow. hiss.

Feb 14th, 2004, 06:07 AM	#6
trunks69420 Now Im Nothing Joined: Jan 2002 Location: Rochester, NY Age: 39 Posts: 2,415	I like this one... It gets me thinkin a bit about my current situation... and i really like how you desribe it... plus you used one of my fav words... "fragile... nin reference... Again.. i really like this a lot __________________ "It wont give up it wants me dead... Goddamn this voice inside my head" five vicodin chased with a shot of clarity...

Feb 21st, 2004, 09:03 AM	#7
Redpyramidhead pazparacolombia Joined: Sep 2002 Location: Restless dreams... Age: 43 Posts: 2,002	I like it fantasytiger! I like the reference to glass as a metaphor for love on it seems like 3 or more different levels in there. The reflection part at the beginning is a great place for that so it draws you right in and at the end when all is shattering....oohhh... Keep writing _RED_ stuff __________________ "..loathsome laughing, mixed with such a cry as no man has heard save for in the phlegathon of unrelatable nightmares; a cry wherein reverberated the horror and anguish of a haunted lifetime packed into one atrocious moment..."

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Feb 10th, 2004, 03:04 PM	#2
tempted Senior Member Joined: Aug 2003 Posts: 2,265	Really nice poem Fantasy,seems like a very deep and personal one but still very good in my opinion...

Feb 13th, 2004, 09:24 AM	#5
fantasytiger Dark Queen Joined: Dec 2002 Location: in your dreams Age: 37 Posts: 589	the reason I added the "OOOO" is because when you read it you are suppose to extend the sound just like when someone adds ........... it means you suppose to have a dramatic pause befor you continue reading it adds dramatic emphasis on the word

Mar 13th, 2004, 02:17 PM	#8
Rei EVA 00 Pilot Joined: Jan 2002 Location: NERV Age: 41 Posts: 2,239	Nice poem tiger, didn't know you like writing poems, now I know it! Keep it up!

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