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Oct 13th, 2002, 01:18 PM | #1 |
Hero of Darkness
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Darkness...
Darkness creeps in
Sweat starts to drip down my brow Tears jerking at my eyes I'm starting to lose it! Memories of you settle in My head starts pounding Why did you do that to me? Why did you say those things? I'm going insane with anger Darkness is consuming my heart A little more and more each day You changed me! I gave you all the trust I had inside my heart and soul I gave you all the Love I had which you threw back in my face! You will never be forgiven You are dead to me now... Forever
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Oct 13th, 2002, 03:05 PM | #2 |
EVA 00 Pilot
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So, you have the same interest of S4H in writing poems ? You must be more than twins to choose similar names and also have the same interests!
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Oct 13th, 2002, 03:14 PM | #3 |
Every One Dies Alone
Joined: May 2002
Location: In the depths of existance where the hot magma flows.
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d4h, nice freestyle. This poem seems to carry emotion and closure. That's what I saw anyways. I don't think I got what you wanted the reader to get out of it.
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All around me are familiar faces Worn out places Worn out faces Bright & early for the daily races Going nowhere Going nowhere Their tears R filling up their glasses No Xpression No Xpression Hide my head I want to drown my sorrows No 2morrow No 2morrow & I find it kindof funny I find it kindof sad. These dreams in which i'm dying, R the best I've ever had |
Oct 13th, 2002, 03:21 PM | #4 |
Hero of Darkness
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Thanks a lot you two! Yea well i was heart broken by a girl and writng poems is just one way to show it off! Oh and btw me and S4H are like brothers!
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Oct 13th, 2002, 11:17 PM | #5 |
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Location: Argentina
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Awesome poem, very deep and full of personal contents. I hope you're better now, for the question regarding the girl who inspired this poem!
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Oct 14th, 2002, 12:25 AM | #6 | |
just a rolling stone
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Location: of what?
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*gets all emmotional* Oh... *sniffle sniffle* That was so *sniff* nice .
Seriously, though; that was a very nice poem. I think it's pretty easy to decipher what you're "talking" about, and this comes from me; someone who's poetry knowledge is equal to 0 ^_^ ). Very nice. I especially liked the 5th...er, stanza... O_O;; Quote:
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Oct 14th, 2002, 05:49 PM | #7 |
Retired...
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Eh don't you people worry about a thing, D4H will snap out of it and find someone new! And if he doesn't me and him can still play SOCOM to get his mind off of it lol
Nice poem dude
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Oct 17th, 2002, 01:40 AM | #8 |
pazparacolombia
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I am impressed with the way you convey your anger in a poem. It's hard to keep it straight especially in a poem about a failed relationship. You did a good job with that. Keep up the good work. Hope it was therapeutic for you.
_RED_ stuff
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Oct 22nd, 2002, 01:25 PM | #9 |
Hero of Darkness
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thanks a lot all of you!
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