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[MakgSnake]

Just a litte experiment with a song I wrote.

You know I will not go for you/to brake the news/I can only take the shoes/not ride in them/I just cannot pretend/It never happened in life/You never really took the knife/To score/what more/do you want me to know/I cant tell you more/My existence has made me go/To flow/with the time/I have/To right the song/Never wanted to go right but wrong/But I guess it is something we have for all/To please/To smile/Just to make a call/And tell them that/they are not alone/We're there for them/Till our very last bone/breaks/and takes all the pain it shakes/The blood/Then comes out/Shows/What we are all about.

Force is something I ain't never gonna try
Believe in me, from today, I ain't never gonna cry

Force is something, I ain't never gonna try
Believe in me, today, nobodys gonna cry.

Time will tell/When you go out for lunch/It'll cast the spell/To hell/with the names we have/What we are/Does it really matter/If I have a car/To show ma self/Like a fuk*ing piece on shelf/I aint no object to touch/And past time when done/Let me take you out/with ma motherfu*ing gun/I dont care you say/Hold me back/The track/I ain't never let you go/With my own gold sack/ To see the front/I will hunt/You down/Doesn't really matter if you white/black/brown/Foce is something I ain't never gonna try/Trust ma yo/I will touch the sky/So high/You wont even see ma soul/My goal/I will reach if I try/So bye bye/You all/Give me a call/When you think/Your done/Just leave the guns/It'll be an ease/I aint jokin with you/We'll live in peace.

Force is something I ain't never gonna try
Believe in me, from today, I ain't never gonna cry

Force is something, I ain't never gonna try
Believe in me, today, nobodys gonna cry.

[Faile]

cool writing .

some sort of rap perhaps ?

[MakgSnake]

Yeah, rap kinda thing. Like I said experiment only.

[Faile]

its always good to experiment.

[Black Heart]

An experiment that turned out quite well. Nice

[Cannibal Clown]

Makg, you know what...you're awesome!

[MakgSnake]

Thanks people.....really.

[Redpyramidhead]

Your rhyme scemes are complicated and creative. I was trying to rap along to it out loud breaking it up into the different rhymes (which were made nice and clear with the slashes between them) and taking a crack at the rythmn and I'd have to say it works out pretty nicely in its own unique style. Makg tha emcee!


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[MakgSnake]

Originally posted by Redpyramidhead
I'd have to say it works out pretty nicely in its own unique style. Makg tha emcee!

Thanks, I have to say....although I wrote this rap style song, I cant rap for sh*t. I have been practicing. But its not that easy at it looks. Need alot of micro seconds break to breathe inbetween. But I am trying my best to reach there. Thanks anyway.