Oh my god dude! That was unbelievabl;y well done. You did an excellent job on this. I can tell that youput thought into it, and the end result is fabulous. It's very original from anything else on the forums, and I enjoyed reading every second of it. The way you put everything together, and the way the story grew as it went on was great! I think that you have a great imagination,and very good at putting thought onto paper,while being descriptive,but not enough to drag on.The way you actually got a scence of sespence and eagerness from me was awesome. If I hear you say that this is crap again,I'll beat you, because it's not. Far from it. And if anyone diisses it, I'll kick their ass! This is great. and the way it ended without an ending, but still concluded what it needed to was very well thought up. I commend you, a round of applause to you my good fellow.