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Darkness 4 Hire

Nov 4th, 2002 07:34 PM

Busted Memories...

Busted Memories

Their dancing is a part of history
First tender kiss... swept away in the breeze
Nights together from sunset to sunrise... gone

Two loving souls; nothing more than memories
Walking past each other
When they used to be together

Not a single glance; not another chance
For her to talk to him; for him to go to her
They used to be inseparable

One would kiss the other; the other kiss right back
These former times of happiness... finished
These opposites never again to attract

Teardrops down their tender cheeks
Laughter of happiness leaving their mouths
To think of what they used to have

Now with it gone, I wonder how
Their very last night together...
Sitting by the Television

Definition of time not having been yet invented
Neither soul could ever get tired
But once the one heart split back to two

Once their entangled souls ran from each other
Seeing them leave and walk away
I think I'm dreaming

This just can't be over...

Sword 4 Hire

Nov 4th, 2002 08:15 PM

Wow, very nice man. That had a lot of good imagery and it really gets you thinking. I think we can all relate to this poem in some way. Nice job oddo!

happy_doughnut

Nov 5th, 2002 01:38 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by Darkness 4 Hire
Busted Memories
Once their entangled souls ran from each other
Seeing them leave and walk away
I think I'm dreaming

This just can't be over...

That's my favorite part :)

This is... a very nice poem. It's so sentimental and touching. It's really very pretty, honest.
I'm not much of a "poem person", but this one is really very nice.
The way they toughts are portrayed are very simple to understand, yet have a deep meaning. It's, I think, very simple to relate to this poem if you've ever been in a relationship and have had it end.

Blah... blah... in short : it's... very nice. :)

Black Heart

Nov 23rd, 2002 10:20 AM

Cool poem :cool:

trunks69420

Nov 23rd, 2002 11:04 AM

Excellent poem man!! I really enjoyed that. i am going through something kinda like that and i can relate. Again great job!

Redpyramidhead

Nov 26th, 2002 01:39 AM

Quote:

But once the one heart split back to two

This poem moved me, largely because I'm going through the same thing right now and have before, too. When you really are that close to somebody, you do feel like one being, with one beating heart, as you put it (or imply,) and then when it ends...itis like trying to live with half a heart. Great Poem.

_RED_ stuff

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